Sarah Cliff
Period 2
9/30/15
An withered Oak, surrounded by weeds,
sleeps under the midnight moon
down to the floor of a blanketed hill.
Hushed wind invokes whispers in the weeds.
“Why so so frail, old Oak?”
“Why so gnarly, old Oak?”
“You seem sad, old Oak.
Crickets chirp a rhythm
anticipating an answer.
The old Oak scans the shimmery blades
of green, so perfectly pointed.
The moon’s silver shine reflects off of
their young tender leaves.
They stand proud.
“Frail, you say? I am neither strong nor weak
Gnarly you say? I am neither glamorous nor repulsive
Sad, you say? I am far from it.”
“I am only enlightened”
The grass whisper violently in the wind
They spend the rest of the night
trying to make sense of the wise
oak’s teachings to no prevail.
When midsummer sun scorches the hilltops the next day,
the Old Oak lies peacefully
among fields of dead grass.
I really enjoy all of the repetition you used. It really pushes your central message.
ReplyDeleteI really like the message in your poem and I think the way you wrote it and repeated certain things made it a very strong piece.
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