The Master
By Jared Lee
The Master
He sits in his tree,
Contemplating life.
How can one be at peace?
He has to thrive in the chaos.
How can one be content?
He must try to quench every thirst.
How can one feel love?
He must harness his hate.
To focus your energy,
You must fall to your knees.
Nothing can be forced.
Everything has a time and a place.
Everything is a circle.
I like how you tied everything together at the end. I think that the last line helps smooth things out, rather than just ending it at the line before it.
ReplyDeleteI think your poem is really interesting and I like how you tied it all together at the end.
DeleteI enjoyed how you put the whole poem in the perspective of the Master and the things he would contemplate and learn to do. It makes the Tao more accessible.
ReplyDeleteI like the showing of the perspective of the master, and I like how you go with a pattern of question/answer in the third stanza.
ReplyDeleteThe way you described the Tao was really interesting. It was clever to describe it by using someone who was wondering how to become one with it.
ReplyDeleteI enjoyed how you included though-provoking questions that invited the readers to immerse themselves in the poem.
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