Walk on Your Own Path
We all must take our own steps
To the right or to left
forward, or backwards
Each person must decide where their loyalties lie
When they yield and when they fight
You cannot control others
And they cannot control you
You cannot the control the universe
Can it control you?
We are our own road blocks
And we must recognize it
You must unblock the path you blocked for yourself
You cannot move another man’s road block
They must walk their own path
I liked how you included a question that matched the theme of your poem which makes the reader think.
ReplyDeleteI really like how you compare the opposites in your poem because they are really concrete examples and explain what you have to say really well. I also liked how you added a question in the middle of your poem because it keeps the reader interested and engaged in reading.
ReplyDeleteI like how this poem talk about choosing your own path of life. That only you stop yourself from achieving. I makes people think about how they are blocking themselves in life.
ReplyDeleteI like how you added a question in the middle, it makes the reader stop and think about it, and it is a nice touch to the poem.
ReplyDeleteI really liked how you added a question which really made you think deeper into our thoughts behind the Tao, it makes the reader really think. Great job on your poem!
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