I am Tao
The beginning and ending
Of the universe
I am the balance of light
And dark
I am the flow of good
And evil
I am the stability of yin
And yang
You are Man
You will see the age of
Only yourself.
You shall let the world be
And run its course
You shall follow the teachings
And learn the Way
You shall connect with nature
And find harmony
I really like the rhythm of your poem!
ReplyDeleteAlso I think it's cool how you repeat the "I am...And" structure.
I really liked how you the good and the evil to different things, it made a clear image in my mind.
ReplyDeleteI liked how your picture connected to your poem and in the first stanza when you talk about embodying the Tao, you state the opposites that make up it.
ReplyDeleteI like how you used "you shall" to show that the Tao is above Man, and I liked the line about seeing the age of only yourself.
ReplyDeleteI really liked the way you formatted the first and second stanzas of the poem. You would give one word, but then you would give its opposite on the next line, for example, "I am the balance of light
ReplyDeleteand dark". That really made the words 'punchier' in a way, and it was overall just really effective.
I really like the overall pacing and flow of the poem, and especially the flow of words within each stanza. The "you are man/ you will see the age of/ only yourself" line was really effective and greatly enhanced by the way you broke lines to pace them. I like the meanings of the entire poem and how you built on Taoist ideas.
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