Why though? ….
What was wrong with him?
Because he wore the color red?
Because he wore the color blue?
Why should a color define one?
How does a color define one?
Red or Blue.
It isn’t just a color is it?
It’s a path.
A path one takes.
Is it a path you were set to?
Was it a path he was set to?
Was it a path he chose to take?
Is it just a path you chose to take?
Brotherhood
A type of brotherhood that came with
Delinquency
Impure crimes
Calloused hands
Stained with blood
All for the sake of a sacred bond
Loyalty?
Staying by their side
Sticking to slinging on stripped streets
Cuts and Guns
Bruises and bullets
Breaking any morals that get in the way
Get in the way of walking this path
Why did you kill him?
Because he was a blood?
Because he was a crip?
The sign he throws up with his scar-engraved hands?!
Were you set to this?
What if he was just set to this path?
Or
Maybe he did chose this
But
The real question remains
Did you chose this path?
Why though?...
I like how you did this kind of in a question format. It's unique and it really adds to the meaning of your poem. My favorite like is probably "Sticking to slinging on stripped streets".
ReplyDeleteI really liked the way you wrote this poem and all of the enjambment that you use. Also I really liked how it was written stylistically I think that (like what Estela said) the question format of it was really cool and added to the meaning. My favorite part was the stanza about loyalty.
ReplyDeleteI like the way your poem starts and how most of it is questions because it's mysterious. I also really like your last stanza.
ReplyDeleteI liked how you didn't just stick to one side of the story, you talked about both of the groups and connected them to each other. I liked the stanza about brotherhood a lot.
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