Allegretto con moto
The taut hairs of the wooden bow
become blurry as they are drawn out over the
resonant steel strings
They hold the intricately carved wood in place
And the swift fingers leave
an invisible trace.
The notes float through the air
to form a sweet, silvery symphony
Twisting, turning
in singing swirls
Pulling, pushing
in constant complexity
And finally settling on a
mellifluous melody.
The notes ask and answer
in playful parlance
One turns arrogant, angry, atonal
causing the other to draw back
demure
An insistent note pierces through the air
(tension
tension
tension)
— until they finally resolve themselves
into
a
harmony.
And so they disappear
Leaving the air to wonder
If they were ever
really
there.
I like the use of alliteration in almost every line of the poem to help it flow. My favorite line is "to form a sweet, silvery, symphony." I also like the use of structure and indenting line to show the passage of time.
ReplyDeleteI really like your line spacing when you say "tension tension tension". It really adds emphasis and creates a sort of build-up, and then when the poem resumes the tension is gone just like the notes you are playing.
ReplyDeleteYour use of alliteration was very effective in your poem, especially in the second stanza. My favorite lines are "The notes ask and answer/in playful parlance." The structure you used in the third stanza was interesting, but it suited the poem.
ReplyDeleteI like how using alliteration is consistent throughout the entire poem. It feels intentional and fitting to the theme rather than a late addition for some poetic devices. My favorite line was "pushing, pulling/in constant complexity."
ReplyDeleteWow, this poem does a great job of personifying and emphasizing all aspects that go into creating music by playing violin. My favorite line is, "And so they disappear,leaving the air to wonder if they were ever really there" because it perfectly sums up how the air still resonates with music until is begins to fade away. Great job!!!!
ReplyDeleteI really like how you used lots of alliteration to create a flowing sense throughout the piece. There's a clear strophe, antistrophe, and epode that follows the normal structure of the ode, and your diction throughout is very representative of good odes. The meter with the hard and soft sounds that you use is also very excellent. Good job.
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