Sarah Cliff
Period 2
5/26/16
Inertia
What am I doing at 6:00 am?
I’ll tell you what is happening at 6:00 am.
I am dancing with unicorns and goblins
While devouring creamy vanilla créme brulee
I am staring at thousands (no, millions) of twinkling
Stars in the night sky.
I fight demons
I save friends
I am surrounded by my wildest accomplishments!
Until-
What am I doing at 6:15 am?
I’ll tell YOU what is happening at 6:15 am.
My ears are writhing
From the undulous and horrendously loud
Battle cries of the enemy.
No wait.
That’s my alarm.
My soul screams as my eyelids unlatch
To open up shop for today,
letting the blinding
morning sunrise torture my mind.
I try to crawl out of my bed
And into the fire
Of today’s responsibilities.
You know what.
No.
I can’t
And I won’t.
10 more minutes.
What am I doing at 6:30 am?
I’ll TELL you what is going on at 6:30 am
I’m realizing that if I don’t get up now
My chem homework
That I had imprudently left off to do
On this horrible morning
Will remain incomplete...
Surely, I’ll be able to sacrifice 10 small minutes to finish-
No.
I can’t
And I won’t.
10 more minutes! Please!
What am I doing at 6:45 am?
I WILL tell you what I am doing at 6:45 am.
I’m stuffing soggy lumps of wheat into my face
Along with watered down butter,
(No wait, that’s milk)
As I ponder this punishment.
Yet would I want to go back to my cave?
For things to go back the way they were?
Maybe I’m a new person now.
Maybe I can live through today.
Who am I fooling, no I’m can’t!
I want my bed...
What am I doing at 7:00 am?
After staring at those purple bags under
What they call
my eyes.
I yearn for the comfort
Of sleep.
Do I succumb to these desires, you ask?
Or do I leave this room
This house?
Go to school?
Graduate?
Found a business?
Cure cancer?
End hunger?
Solve the world’s problems?
Well, we will just have to save that
For a new chapter in our lives.
The structure of the poem is really unique and complements the writing and the purpose really well, and I really liked the repetitive prompt at each stanza that made the poem relatable.
ReplyDeleteI liked the lines "I’m stuffing soggy lumps of wheat into my face/Along with watered down butter/(No wait, that’s milk)," since it was pretty funny and also so true.
I like how relatable and descriptive this poem is, and the little bits of personality from the speaker. I like the line "No wait./That's my alarm."
ReplyDeleteI really like the casual and almost conversational tone of the poem. Additionally, I liked the two usage of parentheses, almost like it was added, kind of like an afterthought, which really adds to showing how "not-awake" the speaker feels when she first wakes up. I like the line, "I am dancing with unicorns and goblins
ReplyDeleteWhile devouring creamy vanilla créme brulee." It really captures the fantastical world of dreams.
I like how all the stanzas related to one thing, but had something different to say. I also really like the second stanza, I thought it was kind of funny. Also I like the way you structured your poem.
DeleteI really like how your poem reflects the way a person feels after waking up and remembering that dreams are not the reality, and a person has responsibilities. I really like all the lines where you chose to use parentheses because the afterthoughts are so accurate to what students feel when they wake up in the morning.
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