Hey “teach”.....
I was wondering if I could have
The dream job
I wanted since I could
remember.
The idealized family
That my mom
said i was destined to have.
Me
Get into that esteemed
College,
But Here
I am.
Average at best
Knowing I won't get into the Prestigious College,
Or maybe have the
perfect family,
Which is all contingent On the grades that I receive now
Which molds and sculpts
The future.
Glorified by the ones that look toward
my “Bright” future
In the titanic tunnel
On the verge of crumbling,
But
I still have all the Support
and love
reinforced by everyone who surrounds me
Yet I am so Constricted,
And confined
And here I stand before you
Craving the satisfaction
The completeness
That is still so far away.
I am held like an oreo
In the tall
Cold
Glass of milk.
Dunking me in and out
But When I am pulled out
I either come out whole
Or crumble back into glass divided,
separated
Still, I am
Studying
and striving
as hard as I can
Hoping that one day I can be as successful as my mother and father
Hoping that I can be as good as they want me to be
As you want me to be
But yet, I stand before you
a subject
in a classroom.
I really liked the oreo metaphor. I liked the last line because it tied the whole poem together. I thought the use of enjambment was really smart to get the reader to understand the feel of your poem.
ReplyDeleteThe way your diction made the poem feel constricting was amazing. The way it made your writing feel after you said "Yet I am so Constricted" set the tone for the rest of the piece.
ReplyDeleteThe use of metaphors and smilies in your poem really got my attention so that I was able to see what type of perspective you really had on how you were feeling. My favorite line from your poem was definitely "But yet, I stand before you a subject in a classroom" which did a really good job displaying exactly how you felt. I really connected to when you started talking about how you are striving to be as successful as your parents and be as good as they want you to be, in which I feel the same way.
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