Blank Pieces
By Rijul Agarwal
There was a streak of light
That once flew through
the sky at night
One that everyone
Claimed to see
The men gathered shortly after
Ready to clash
To seize their opportunities
To rise in the eyes of the others
And bask in a pool of power
One man
Claimed the star
Was yellow
A golden bolt of lightning
Summoned to strike all that steal
Another
Firmly against the other
Argued the star
Was red
A bloody symbol of carnage and death
To warn those that commit murder
The wise elderly man
Suggested the star
Was white
Clearly a symbol for the everlasting peace
That is to come
But the star itself
Knew that it
Was clear
A blank streak of light
With millions of unfilled pieces
Awaiting the colors to fill them up
Awaiting the colors
to change the world.
I really like your poem's message that something strange and unique can have so many interpretations. My favorite part is probably the last stanza, because it wraps up the poem with a cool message. The overarching metaphor of the poem was really cool.
ReplyDeleteThe way that you made power something physical and made it men that abused or used it. The line "With millions of unfilled pieces" really makes it feel like the common human goal to accomplish.
ReplyDeleteI really like the way you had used figurative language to describe the star. My favorite line is "A bloody symbol of carnage and death" as it really portrays the star.
ReplyDeleteI really liked how your poem had sections that rhymed which made it enjoyable to read as well as your use of figurative language to describe how the men interpreted the star. My favorite line is "to rise in the eyes of the others" because it really conveys how many people want to be seen as powerful.
ReplyDeleteI liked how you used enjambment to give the poem a good rhythm that flows. My favorite lines were "A blank streak of light / With millions of unfilled pieces". All in all, I enjoyed the message of this poem.
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